Script- first draft

INT. POLICE STATION- DUSK
The station is rife with people, arrests being made and files being transported around to various desks Laced around the place. People working off benches and holding cells bursting. In a singular office, we see CRUZ, scruffy looking shirt and detective badge hanging around his neck, a cigar in his mouth, staring into the window of the offIce. He seems to be thinking things over. He looks over to the desk, seeing the piles upon piles of cases.
DELILAH comes storming in the office, pushing through the door of the office. She is wearing a long dark coat, long curly hair and lipstick.
CRUZ
(V.O)
It was A normal Saturday in Crime town. chaos working like clockwork, for everyone. Not every night is the same in this place, never.
DELILAH
(Panting)
Cruz! I need your help, you’re the only one I can trust right now!
CRUZ
(V.O)
Delilah Miller, formerly known as Delilah Rose. One of the prettiest women in the City, and my... friend
DELILAH goes straight to the whiskey decanter in the bottom drawer of CRUZ’s desk, pulls out a glass, proceeds to pour.
CRUZ, startled by the entrance of DELILAH, puts his cigar down into the ash tray and leans up against his desk, arms crossed.
CRUZ
(Sighing)
Delilah, Its been a while...
DELILAH downs the drink and then proceeds to pour herself another whiskey.
DELILAH
Enough of the small talk Cruz. Terrance is dead...
She stands still, staring into her glass, tears fall into the whiskey.

2.
CRUZ walks over to DELILAH, hugging her sobbing body. Glass clutched to her chest as tears fall into the glass.
CRUZ
...I’m sorry... I’m not too good at all of this
(soft whisper)
How?
DELILAH pushes away from the embrace slowly, clearly not wanting to end the moment. She slowly looks up, mascara starting to run down her Blushing cheeks.
DELILAH
Shoot out, his office got raided... Cops suspect the... Mafia...
CRUZ
(V.O)
The mafia... Once they have you in their sights for whatever reason, you might as well start digging your grave.
She suddenly thrusts back into CRUZ’s chest, sobbing louder this time. CRUZ comforts her some more, resting his head on top of hers, briefly enjoying the moment when SUSAN barges through.
SUSAN is holding a lot of files, glasses slipping down her nose and hair in a mess from rushing around constantly for CRUZ. SUSAN scurries towards the desk trying to look for space. CRUZ and DELILAH watch her As she awkwardly stands In the middle of the room.
SUSAN
Cruz, I’m so sorry, these just need tying up. Where do you need them?
CRUZ moves out of DELILAH’s embrace to help SUSAN pick up her files.
CRUZ
It’s fine. Leave them over there.
CRUZ and SUSAN finish picking up the files, and place them on the floor by CRUZ’s desk. SUSAN smartens up and leaves.
SUSAN
If you need any help, you know where I am.
SUSAN leaves the room, with some files still in hand.

3.
DELILAH looks through the window, street lights illuminating her face, slowly sipping on the remains of her whiskey.
DELILAH
What am I going to do now he’s gone? If he was involved with the mafia, then they will come for me next! Oh Cruz, you need to help me.
CRUZ smokes the last of his cigar, stubs it out in the ashtray and joins DELILAH by the window. They both stare out into the raining streets outside.
CRUZ
Im trying to help the best I can, you know how we approach the mafia on matters like this...
DELILAH
Yes, but why him? He was always such a nice man, to everyone, so How on Earth has been murdered?
DELILAH finishes her whiskey and places the glass back in the drawer. She gets ready to leave.
DELILAH
I need you to help me find him.
CRUZ looks back at DELILAH at the door, looking tired.
DELILAH
Please Cruz, I know you’re the only one who can solve cases like these.
CRUZ
I’ll try my best.
DELILAH opens the door to leave, before blowing a gentle kiss to CRUZ.
DELILAH
See you around.
DELILAH leaves the room slowly closing the door behind her. CRUZ stands there for a moment staring at DELILAH as she walks through the street outside the window. He then proceeds to sit down and flick through some of the looming files around him.

4.
CRUZ
(V.O)
Like I said, no two days are the same.
FADE OUT.
CUT TO:
TITLE SEQUENCE
CUT TO:
EXT. THE STREETS OF THE CITY
CRUZ walks through The streets of the city, smoking a cigarette. He is wearing a worn down fedora and crinkled trench coat. People push past him, not looking. He is clearly annoyed by every ordeal he comes across. He picks out a notebook and reads Over a scribble of notes.
CRUZ (V.O.)
The city isn’t for Eveyone. It’s dog eat dog out here. You gotta win big if you want have a small chance of survival. Even then, you’re always being chased down by the big leagues.
CRUZ proceeds to walk towards his destination. Not phased by the crowds. He arrives at the crime scene.
CRUZ (V.O.)
The last known location of Terrance Miller. Found dead in his study. Well known around the area, humble guy. Trying to make it big in the whiskey business.
CRUZ walks through the house into the study of the victim to find the desk taped off. The body of TERRANCE is lying on top of the desk. CRUZ scans the study and sees TERRANCE leads a life of luxury, With a display case of precious artefacts, faberge egg and priceless paintings hanging around the room.
CRUZ puts on his rubber gloves to inspect the body. He slowly lifts up the head of the victim and grabs the documents from underneath. The detective scans them briefly and sees they are divorce papers.

5.
CRUZ
Well, looks like trouble in paradise then. The question now is... What did Delilah do?
CRUZ looks around the room, trying to look for more clues. Cameras are flashing everywhere with people now starting to rush in and out of the room, taking evidence. Across the room, CRUZ sees a red lipstick.
CRUZ
(shouting)
Claude! Have any leads?
CLAUDE appears in the crowd. He is similar looking to CRUZ With a scruffy looking outfit but is carrying around a briefcase.
CLAUDE
Maid was here. Cleaning upstairs when she heard the gunfire. She looks shaken. Poor thing.
CRUZ
(V.O)
Claude Minetta, the nicest cop you’ll ever meet. How he isn’t dead yet will be beyond me. Been working on a lot of cases together lately.
CRUZ
I’ll see what she has to say. See what else you can find Claude.
CLAUDE and CRUZ exchange nods of approval and both disappear into the crowds.
CUT TO:
INT. CRUZ’S OFFICE- A FEW DAYS LATER
CRUZ is staring at the evidence wall. A few suspects have been crossed out on the wall. Only 2 remain.
CRUZ
(V.O)
Thomas Sykes, Mafia leader, parents are Al and Edna Sykes, notorious crime bosses throughout the City. Butchers of the innocents.
CRUZ takes a picture of THOMAS from the wall to examine him closer. The picture is of him and his wife GLADYS.

6.
CRUZ
(V.O)
Family man too. Gotta get the money in one way or another.
CRUZ looks back up at the wall to look at the last suspect, JANET STONE
CRUZ
(V.O)
And then there’s Ms. Stone, Terry’s P.A, reports floating round of the two having an affair. It explains the divorce papers.
CRUZ stands thinking for a moment before SUSAN walks through the door. She seems to be quite excited
SUSAN
Cruz! We have a lead. Abandoned warehouse on Copper Street. Reports of banging and screaming coming from about 15 minutes ago.
CRUZ looks at SUSAN in shock. He starts pacing towards his coat rack, lights a cigarette and ushers SUSAN out of the door.
CRUZ
Let’s go catch a killer!
CUT TO:
INT. ABANDONED WAREHOUSE
CRUZ paces towards the entrance to the warehouse, SUSAN hot on his heels. The two continue into the warehouse to find, JANET‘S body on the floor.
CRUZ
(echoing)
I know you’re in here, show yourself!
The warehouse echoes with CRUZ’s voice. The echo dies down and the two hear a lighter flicker close to them. CRUZ looks around to find DELILAH.
DELILAH
Well hello... Cruz
DELILAH flips back the lighter, puffing on her cigarette.

7.
CRUZ
What? This does not add up.
CRUZ seems to be confused by the ordeal and is trying to think the process through.
CRUZ
Why? Why kill your husband?
DELILAH
(mocking)
Why kill ya husband?
DELILAH starts to chuckle loudly, waving around a gun in her hand. CRUZ ushers SUSAN to leave the warehouse immediately. SUSAN walks away slowly. DELILAH notices this and is concerned.
DELILAH
And where exactly do you think you’re going?
DELILAH shoots SUSAN. SUSAN falls to the floor, Blood poooling quickly around her. CRUZ stands in shock, fight or flight kicking in. He goes for his holster, when Delilah loads the gun and points it at the detective.
DELILAH
Not so fast mister, or you’ll be like her!
CRUZ
YOu’re not getting away with this!
DELILAH
And where’s the fun in that?
DELILAH starts to edge forward towards CRUZ. Smoke plumes out of her mouth as she drags on her cigarette before throwing it out.
CRUZ
Why do it?
DELILAH
(chuckling)
Well, let me tell you my little Detective.
DELILAH leans up against a wall of the warehouse, gun still in hand, poised to shoot at CRUZ if he makes just one wrong move. CRUZ scans the room for help

8.
DELILAH
Terrance was a lovely man. He had a lot of cash too. He treated me perfectly, until I found out he Was having an affair and wanted to divorce me.
CRUZ
There are other ways to resolve the problem, I hear counselling works pretty well.
CRUZ
You need to hand yourself in...
DELILAH
Do you think the police would arrest little old me?
DELILAH scurries to the entrance Of the warehouse an peers out. The two can hear the sound of a motor fast approaching. A car pulls up, full of people, including THOMAS SYKES. They are all smart casual.
DELILAH
Brother, how nice of you to help. I think you know what to do.
DELILAH turns away, ash she walks away she lifts her arm up in the air, poised to give the signal.
DELILAH
Good bye my little detective
DELILAH lowers her arm And the sound of gunfire echos the end.
FADE TO:
BLACK

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